I tried to incorporate some of the thoughtful suggestions my previous post generated, but am not quite ready to call this a demo.

I put in a guide instrument for my vocal “reachings” which didn’t quite do the trick – IMHO.

I also added bass and another little synth part. I’m liking the instrumental ideas, but I fear, with the thinking about the singing, that I may have lost some of the track’s energy.

If I can get more comfortable with the vocals (and have another go at ’em) and add some background vocals I am fairly confident I can get this one shaped into a demo next session.

Hear the experiment here: